Friday, March 16, 2007

BROKEN MASTER: PAGES 2 and 3

Been having some browser issues over the last few days, meaning this post is a little later than I thought it was going to be. I switched to Netscape after IE decided it no longer wants to work but for some reason, signing into my blog crashes Netscape dead. Hopefully, I can get all this stuff worked out and get back on track. In the meantime, here's a couple of more pages.

Oh, I got an email from an aspiring penciller asking if he could draw some samples from this script. Anyone that wants to, feel more than free. I'd be glad to provide a critique.

PAGE TWO
FULL PAGE SPLASH!

Rain pours down. Lightning flashes. Thunder booms. It’s quite a contrast from the idyllic weather in Nanda Parbat.

In the middle of the raging elements, BATMAN slices through the concrete canyons of Gotham City, borne aloft on his razor-thin bat-line.

The bat-signal lights up the sky above him.

1- BATMAN (caption): In the world I live in, the rain is a FRIEND.
2- BATMAN (caption): On a night like THIS, all the decent people in Gotham are huddled up at home with their families.
3- BATMAN (caption): All the DECENT people.
4- BATMAN (caption): It makes my life so much easier.

TITLE: BROKEN MASTER (part one of two)

CREDITS:

Writer: Keith Champagne
Penciller: Tbd
Inker: Tbd
Letterer: Tbd
Colorist: Tbd
Grasshopper: Michael Siglain
Grand Master: Peter Tomasi


PAGE THREE
PANEL ONE

The Bat-signal sits, seemingly deserted, on the roof of the precinct house. No one seems to be around to have lit it, yet nonetheless, there it shines into the stormy night.

NO DIALOGUE

PANEL TWO

In the foreground, THE QUESTION hides in the shadow of the bat-signal. His identity should be obscured until the next panel.

Batman swings to a landing atop the roof of the precinct.

1- BATMAN: You might as well come out. I saw you three blocks ago.
2- BATMAN: I have a busy night. What do you want? And how did you gain access to the signal?

PANEL THREE

The Question steps out of the shadows.

3- THE QUESTION: And here I thought it was MY job to ask the questions.

PANEL FOUR

Batman shoots the Question an icy glare. Pure intimidation.

4- BATMAN (caption): Vic Sage. THE QUESTION.
5- BATMAN (caption): Unless the world is ending, he should know BETTER. Only GORDON has the right to call me this way.
6- BATMAN: If you’re wasting my time, you’re not going to like the ANSWERS.

PANEL FIVE

The Question holds out his hands, palms forward, gesturing for Batman to stand down.

7- THE QUESTION: Unclench, big man. You're gonna pop a blood vessel.
8- THE QUESTION: I’ve got an urgent message for you from a mutual FRIEND.
8- THE QUESTION: Judomaster. He needs your HELP.

4 comments:

SallyP said...

Very nice. It also confirms my opinion that Batman is a bit...to tense. If he would just take some nice laxatives, he'd probably be a happier man.

moira said...

This is great! (though it would be even greater if you'd put up at least 5 or 6 pages at a time)

Normally, Batman seems to view fighting as something he does as a necessary part of his mission, never as something he does competitively, never to prove who's best. (Not to say he doesn't get a real shot of guilty pleasure any time he beats any one of those mentioned.)
Anyway, I'm sure you've got a clever twist in the plot to compel him to do this and I'm really interested to see what it is.

Ultimately, I'd guess that it might have something to do with caring about what happens to others, not that he'd ever let on.

Chris Yeoman said...

That's another great page mate!

MrNinja said...

Great stuff!

BAP!
POW!
THWAP!

There ain't a mofo out there that can handle that.

(Is the Shogun of Harlem in this tourney?)