Tuesday, March 13, 2007

Broken Master: PAGE ONE


A scenic view of NANDA PARBAT, vibrant, green, and full of life.

The village is ringed on all sides by vast, snow-covered mountain ranges. The sky above is brilliant blue, dotted with soft white clouds. It’s the picture of a simple, beautiful, paradise.

From a distance it’s hard to tell but as we get closer to the mountains, it will become clear that there are temples carved directly out of the stone.

1- CAPTION: Nanda Parbat.


Closer on the mountains that have been painstakingly transformed over the years into a breathtaking display of rock cut architecture. An entire second community lives in ornate temples that have been excavated out of the vertical face of the mountains.

NOTE: For an introduction to rock cut architecture, try:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ellora or Google the term “Rock Cut Architecture.”



Zooming in on a balcony attached to the exterior of a large, pillared chamber of one of the temples.

A MAN sits in a bamboo chair on the balcony. This is RIPLEY JAGGER, The Judomaster. He’s not in costume. In fact, he’s shirtless and his lower back and torso are heavily bandaged. Although we don’t need to see it in this panel, his legs are useless. They’re bound together by straps of canvas at the ankles, knees, and thighs.

There’s a second man standing obscured in the shadows behind him. We’ll see shortly that this is BANE.



Angle on Ripley Jagger.

His eyes are squinted as he tirelessly scans the village far below. His face is pinched, tight with the pain that he’s feeling every second of every day.

Bane, from behind Jagger, places his hand on Judomaster’s shoulder.

2- BANE: Easy, my former little Judomaster.
3- BANE: There’s no need to get up, not on MY account.


Angle on Bane, revealing his identity. I thought this might be a good time to redesign him a bit to make him look a little bit less like a Mexican wrestler and more like a super villain.

Either way, he’s not wearing his mask and is looking down at Ripley Jagger with a cold, smug grin on his face. He has the Judomaster costume slung around his shoulders the way a hunter wears the pelt of an animal he’s killed.

4- BANE: Your FRIENDS will be here soon enough.


Anonymous said...

Great start Keith! I love the "mexican wrestler" part lol.

SallyP said...

It must be awfully frustrating to have all these wonderful ideas burgeoning in your head, and not be able to use them, due to editorial fiat.

Nevertheless, this does sound like a very good story.

Anonymous said...

Yeah me too! PAGE TWO NOW! please...:D

keith champagne said...

It's frustrating but you get used to it, Sally. I like to think of it as part of paying my dues. Otherwise, I'd kill somebody.

Tom Nguyen said...

cool beans...any relation to Drunken Master?

Brad-Brown said...

I hope our own Mr Ninja shows up somewhere. He'd put the beat-down on Bane. I haven't been this excited since Ted Grant boxed Cassius Clay. More pages!!!